Ahhh, poetry. It is good again, to be writing. In the quiet of my home.
So I will share some lines...and it is still, almost a white draft...
The Drummers
Gone Before Daylight
O’
little one can we speak
of
the weak and of the lost
behind
their backs
the
good book tells all who will listen
tales
of less wanting more
more
being the lesser of two evils
before
you ever entered the desert
where
did it get them boys
lost and coming down from a rush
brotherly
love gone wrong
one
a lover
the
other a killer who dreamed of being a drummer
both
disguised in sheep’s clothing
cheaply
made over seas
where
things turn and turn
on
a dime buying half a soul
in
the corner of a bar
a
woman sits and eyes the crowd
broad
are her fingers
but
true love continually slips through
red
eye light fixtures
dangle
and swing over head
moody
and tantalizing
she
can’t leave it all behind
Eve’s
first mistake was declaring
her
first born was a man
before
he ever opened his eyes
the
brother’s keeper cast out
no
choice but leaving it all behind
I
had a child my first born
day
and night I lay by its side
asking
nothing but you to save her
now
I wander across the sands of time
I
left the bar
I
dropped my sword
reread
your words and only found wisdom
where
is the justice
now
we write our own book of life
growing
older on a worlds cheap dime
open
eyes and no disguises.
Not really sure how it will all pan out. I struggle with form over writing lines...send me back to writing camp, and I won't roll my eyes again...ever.
2 comments:
This one is stunning, Elizabeth. Work on the third stanza about the woman in the bar. Seems to sidetrack. Not sure how it relates. If it does... make a connection.
Please keep working on this one. Be specific and stay angry. This is good.
Oh, and I love that self portrait.
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