tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8139980430155806217.post6042429534103840779..comments2023-04-13T04:45:31.494-07:00Comments on Creative TMI: Right Under Our NosesChef Ehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11198603107302675448noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8139980430155806217.post-86087166601571243952011-07-08T20:04:57.889-07:002011-07-08T20:04:57.889-07:00Ah yes the critters! Too often that happened on th...Ah yes the critters! Too often that happened on the school bus!!<br /><br />I'd look at the use of commas in this one and especially the last stanza. You start strong with unique images but then some of the commas, linebreaks and line lengths don't flow as we'll as the first stanza. Great material to work with though!Jessie Cartyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13181286764480973423noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8139980430155806217.post-71346669305008515132011-07-08T04:37:50.175-07:002011-07-08T04:37:50.175-07:00I used to have dreams about coffins floating in wa...I used to have dreams about coffins floating in water...what does this mean???Toonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02867993460493875221noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8139980430155806217.post-24423245986281039112011-07-07T16:41:49.129-07:002011-07-07T16:41:49.129-07:00I love what you have going on here, Elizabeth. Wel...I love what you have going on here, Elizabeth. Well, the poem part! ha! So good to read your poems and get some inspiration!Debbiehttp://iftodaywehear.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.com